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Stop waiting for me
I can't wait for you
You broke my heart
You split it in two

Maybe one day
I could have it all
Maybe I could be
Someone you call

My heart stands alone
On a battlefield for two
I have other allies
But all I want is you

If I were to never have met you
That'd be of no use
For my heart has a place
Reserved just for you


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Very nice and heartfelt just work on the ending a little and I would suggest to take out the first line on the last stanza. Like since I met you I realize my heart has a place for you. As the first part of that has conflicting thoughts to the last 2 lines.
I like it very much though.


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