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it seems the more I write...the better i seem to get...or so i think...feel free to be honest...but here is another poem for you guys...i hope you like it...because i think i absolutely love it...

My Time In The Garden

There are many flowers and a most beautiful rose…
Sitting in a garden with an overwhelming scent…
I’ve searched for the rose my whole life I suppose…
I assure you that my time has been well spent…

They say good things come to those who wait…
This isn’t like any rose you can easily find…
Beauty beyond any dream we create…
It is most definitely one of a kind…

To find this rose I had to explore…
Holding onto this one sensation…
While not knowing what is in store…
Hoping that this rose is my salvation…

I’ve finally reached the rose at last…
Looking back this wasn’t so bad…
My heart full of joy it's beating so fast…
I’ve found my happiness and for that I’m glad…


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SRECKO_MARTAC
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very nice poem


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Hi Jony,

I am reading your poems and you have a fantastic talent.. I am an artist my self not a writer. Whenever I create something I love people saying bad things cause on although it hurts, i can improve on them. Said that as reader and not an expert I would suggest to pay attention to rhythm and musicality when you create your verse... example: my hard times are now part of the past... is too long and the ryme is lost.. my hard times are now past. Sounds better I think... sorry... a humble comment


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Homer_Bozarth
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i love reading your poems jony. they are nice, sweet and enjoyable reading sweety


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Michael_Wolfe
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Thx Jony for another great poem...


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thanks for the comments guys...i'm glad you liked it...umm...I guess you read my poem before i made the change Robb...i changed that line...but don't worry...i thank you for your advice...thanks...

My heart full of joy it's beating so fast...


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write the book


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Janian_Nenanivik
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very beautiful and sweet! does the rose s5tand for love? or could it stand for many things? such as a dream, or maybe just the true joy of life in general? my friend dean , from england also writes great emotional poetry. dean hargreaves.


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the rose stands for happiness...and when it comes to happiness...it could mean many things...as we all have our unique happiness...to some happiness is being with family, finding love, going on an adventure...etc...so it stands for many things that bring you happiness...yea i know dean...he also has the gift to write poetry...he's shared some poems...and i think they're great...@ Ike...well i'll think about writing a book when I have enough poems...


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Maybe we could do a combined book Jony?????


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that'd be great...let's see where our poetry takes us...


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Antony_Terrance_Parker
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Why dont you guys set up your own poetry group on here.You could include the gay girls as well.I dont know how you would do this but there are special interest groups.
Goodluck


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well i'm already in the poetry group...i dont' know if you joined the poetry group Dean...but it's good group...sometimes you get comments sometimes you don't...


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WHat group Jony?

About "Words from across a Pond" for the title??

I had a few poems put in my church magazine, but nothing else, They not the ones I put on here course


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Michael_Wolfe
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I would lve to see you too get together on a book..I would buy one...


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the poetry group here on gays...title sounds good...but let's try some more ideas just to make it more interesting...


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Michael_Wolfe
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Let us know when you start your frist discussion about your poems..

How about discussion group name Poems by D & J..


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well Dean if you wanted to create your own poetry group let me know...so i could join...


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Janian_Nenanivik
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you guys togethr would be awesome. go for it!


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poetic love XD LOL sorry,that hit me and just had to say it


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Michael_Wolfe
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Thats so true Ike...I think they would make a good team


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Janian_Nenanivik
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I like that! "poetic love"


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i don't know why...but i'm thinking..."fountain of words"...but let's keep searching...


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