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The way you write seems very stream of consciousness. You have very interesting characters and plot events but you do this thing that some people do where they basically say the same sentence 2 or more ways in the same paragraph. It doesn't sound as good when someone says "My dog is fluffy and big. He is very large and has fur that is soft and sticks out a lot." compared to "I have a large dog with soft, fluffy fur." Do you understand what I'm trying to say?

(P.S. I'm not saying you're a bad writer and I don't intend any offense to you or your work. I think you have potential for greatness, you simply need to fine-tune your writing process.)


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heyaa...

thank you so much for the feedback. without critics you don't get anywhere.. ... and i think i get what you mean. if thats the only problem then ill definitely change that. i appreciate it you taking the time to read my story...

thank you
Violet


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Always willing to do what I can for a fellow writer.


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