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This poem is the deepest i've written so far...and i'd like to really share it on here...please take note i'm not an expert & don't know much about poetry...except for rhyming...so let's not criticize me too much...lol...but yea...i hope you guys like it...feel free 2 share your thoughts and feelings about this poem...

To And From My Beating Heart...

Alone in this room where there is no light...
I can't escape though I can't say I'll try...
Without you as my strength it is useless to fight...
But I can't seem to figure out a reason why...

You seem to think that I am weak...
That is why I'm in this place...
Yet I'm the one you can't defeat...
I'm the one you can't replace...

I can't hold on I'm beginning to slip...
Why can't I go on and leave you behind???
I'm begging you to release me from your grip...
There is nothing here for me to find...

You try to leave me in an attempt to forget...
But you can't and you won't so long as I live...
There is still hope don't give up just yet...
Take my love and it will help you forgive...

Why do you give when I'm unworthy to receive???
It's obvious to say that I don't deserve you...
But it seems I'm the one I tried to deceive...
Please tell me now what I need to do...

Accept these emotions and learn how to feel...
Tap into my strength and open the door...
Once I'm inside your wounds will heal...
I'll be here forever to help you once more...

You fought to stay where you belong...
Now I've found my missing part...
You were always with me all along...
For I can't live without my heart...


Posted

wow!
Jony its really really good.
I connected to your poem.
all i can say is wow.


Posted

It was a very nice poem thanks for sharing Jony.


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that is beautiful


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fascinating, just fascinating! LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Ryan_Siriwardene
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publish it!!! Let the whole world see it!


Kyukim8999
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you're weak? but u will stronger later
strong love


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well i'm glad you guys liked it...the idea and feeling comes from the mistake of thinking that i once believed that my heart was the one making me weak...and the farther i got from feeling anything the better & stronger i would become...but the harder i tried...the more difficult it became...and instead of running from my emotions...i had to learn to embrace both good & bad...and this poem was basically a dialogue between me and my heart had some time ago...but i'm glad i was able to express it creatively and to share it with those people who feel like i once did...again i'm not an expert poet...but i'm proud that it turned out the way it did...thanks again guys for your comments...


Alex_Lee_34387
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tear jerker!
awesome poem there =]


KATS_JOSH
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its awesome keep trying u'll b an expert =)


Robert_Connors
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I can relate dude hit home for me, u should publish it no lie :-)


Mac_D._Yankey
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Like your thoughts and am sure we have all had such emotions at some point in life. Please continue to develope and share your talents as you are helping many others to express themselves with your writings.


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well i'll be happy to share more when i decide to write more...i'm happy you guys were touched by it and glad that you liked it...


Michael_Wolfe
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I love it and I am happy that you share it with us..
Have you post it in the poetry group yet...


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yea i already posted it in the poetry group...but not many people comment on there...i only got one comment there on this poem...i also posted 2 other poems on there...but there not as powerful as this one was...but no one commented on them...those were my first 2 tho...and i think you can see that i'm so new at poetry w/those...


Posted

wow....i really like your poems.
i really like the second one.
thanks for sharing


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that's very nice


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that's very nice


Robert_Connors
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so we wish and thank u :-)


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Alrite well i'll post up my previous 2...again you can obviously see that i'm pretty new...haha...

Hmm...

As the essence of life starts to leave my body...
Something else in its place is still trying to keep me alive...

As my soul falls into an endless darkness...
A distant light still calls out to me...

And as my mind wanders into the space of nothingness...
l'm clustered by memories and thoughts that still hold value...

Though I can no longer see myself...
A part of me isists in believing that I am still here ...

What a strange thing it is to feel this way...
Even though I can hardly call this a feeling...

Because there seems to be no name for this...
I can only wonder if this feeling truly exists???

(sigh)...
hmm...


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I don't have a title for this yet...as i don't know what to call it really...i've been tryin to think of somethin dramatic...but still no luck...

???

when i look into your eyes...
i see a person beyond description...

when i look into your heart...
i step into a pool of overwhelming emotions...

when i look into your soul...
both your darkness & light are a reflection of me...

& as i look into your very essence...
i ask myself who are you???...

then suddenly you give me your answer...
& you say to me...

i'm you...


Posted

Jony, these are wonderful poems. They are truly from your heart and that is what makes a good poem. Someone writing perfect poetry that does not touch my heart is a poet that I do not care for.

But you write as your heart tells you and that, in my opinion, is what makes a truly great poet and what I enjoy reading.

My best to you and your poetry as you feel from the heart and write from the heart.

Love you,

Wayne


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thanx wayne...the one thing i've been able to do since then is listen to my heart...and it hasn't failed me since then...so i sure will...


Robert_Connors
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Nice !!!!!!!



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