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nothing to say
with no glance from you
watering eyes, glow like the moon
fear of doubt, fear of me
case of fates closed, our cards, all played
life line cut, roll the die
escaping the sudden sadden
swimming through dark opaque waters
shark infested
play your next move, wisely,
as your mind plays Russia roulette, as you sit on a pedestal
sweating in fear and angst
grasping the air before you
the machine goes dead
like the shallow shores of your eyes
can't seem to catch happiness
the drugs she took are in my hands
this burden i bare, this burden i keep
in the shallow shores of your eyes


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holly shit thats good...i like this one a lot.

" POWREFULL" !!


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XD thank you
it started out as a rant then i realized i could use this lol


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really???

"wow your good"


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wow, thank you for such a compliment


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your very welcone brittnay.


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Brittnay.......I realize you have seen and seen much through your young eyes. These are very well written. Pics are so vivid. Are you published?


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no no i am not lol
i just started writing again, cassie got me into it
my previous best friend was an amazing writer, and she always put me down
lol turns out she wasn't a very good friend
but thank you, it's very nice to read that :]


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it seems your ex friend may have been jeolous of your work, your very talented you and cassie need to get on the ball and start publishing.... your both very good.


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thank you
i don't know if i'll ever do that
my english teach writes poetry, she always bragged about my best friend being so good
i like gays.com bc ppl always are so positive
it's like safe grounds here lol


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Kayliegh_May
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Wonderful. Powerful even.
Honestly I wish I had the freedom that seems to be in your works...
but my mind works in patterns that I find very hard to stray from.
Never stop writing.


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patterns are good
i wish i could stay focused that way lol


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Kayliegh_May
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Everyone has their own style right xP it's only human to look at something and wish we could be or do the same once in a while.


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true x3


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