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I just had to get my feelings out and not with a short story.. this was just what i felt like writing. Its shitty, i'm sorry but here..


Even Though

I watched as I let her walk away,
The screaming, the fighting, the pain I caused her,
Why did we have to pay?
For months it had been like this
and for months I had hated myself for what I caused.
This was the right thing to do,
This was what I had to do
Even though I felt screaming
Even though my heart wanted to stop beating.

Don’t go,
Please stay with me, I can’t live without you here
My heart won’t beat my mind won’t think my lungs won’t breathe
Don’t walk away, I didn’t mean those things
Please don’t let me leave.
You’re all I see, you’re all I need, you’re all I think
Just don’t leave.

Even though she was my heart and my soul I let her slip away,
The tears caused by my own doing was too much to put her through.
This was right, this what what should’ve happened
She begged me not to leave, she begged me to stay,
But I just couldn’t cuase her pain.
I didn’t want this,
She was my everything.
And as she walked away
All my heart and thoughts were screaming…

Don’t go,
Please stay with me, I can’t live without you here
My heart won’t beat my mind won’t think my lungs won’t breathe
Don’t walk away, I didn’t mean those things
Please don’t let me leave.
You’re all I see, you’re all I need, you’re all I think
Just don’t leave.

Looking back at all the people that had an opinion on the matter,
All they said was to go
and they were the ones that cuased us to shatter.
They opposed us and set fire to our love
My heart said fight, my mind said flight.
She’s only going to hurt more if you let her suffer
End her misery,
If you really love her.

I had to end my heart to keep her’s safe
And as I stare at the knife on the counter
The only things that crossed my mind were about her


Don’t go,
Please stay with me, I can’t live without you here
My heart won’t beat my mind won’t think my lungs won’t breathe
Don’t walk away, I didn’t mean those things
Please don’t let me leave.
You’re all I see, you’re all I need, you’re all I think
Just don’t leave.

Those words crossed my mind like a broken record
And as I slipped away I saw her face
Even though those things were said
Tears were shed,
And hearts were broken
She didn’t walk away
But I was too late.


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Why do you think this work was shitty ? Anyways I just wanna say I've just read It n It's really nice (poem/story). Though It fills up sadness , but It's nice ..


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I love it. As Ella said it fills you up with sadness, but that is what makes it good, it makes the reader feel what you were feeling, and if you can do that than you are a great writer. You can't really say it's crap cause it's not, it makes a reader feel the same emotion as you, which is extremely hard to do.


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Yup .. I couldn't agree more with you Siany.. That's exactly how I felt for Aubrie too , her work is really good even after reading I can feel sad , but I know the person who carried out the whole story must have felt even sadder ..


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HeartBreaking but i loved it :-)


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