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Are there any good musicians could write a tune for these words?? I can write words but I'm crap at music.



Our Future

Do what we say
Work hard everyday
Do what you should
Always be good.

Then you’ll get a job
You won’t be a yob.
Plenty of Bread
Loads of street cred

So I worked every day
Did just as they say
I tried to be good
Just like I should.

I don’t have a job
They call me a yob
My hopes have all died
Why have they lied?

If you work hard
Don’t be a retard
There still is no work
You’ll end up a jerk

Don’t give me false hope
Treat me like a dope.
Tell me it straight
Explain my fate.

We didn’t cause this
A financial abyss.
So why must we pay
With our life everyday


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Tommy_Storey
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It`s,good,Dean,but i am Sorry that i cannot help you tho. lol.


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David_Dubber
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Hi Dean,

Yet another terrific poem from you and so very true to life. The people who caused all this financial mess are still living a life of 'old riley'


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Dave_Mack
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I am sure we must have at least ONE person on this site who can put music to the words.. C'mon guys... Please someone step forward and bring Deans words to life.


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Homer_Bozarth
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thats a nice song Dean. i wish i can elp you out but i am not music encline as well sorry sweety


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Ok, I'll see what I can do with this. I do write music and that's my major in college so hopefully I can come up with a good tune for you.


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I am a composer and composition and production is also my major. Just from the words, it sounds hip-hop or rap to me. Does it have a chorus or a bridge? Perhaps a little structure in the lyrics would easier help the composer structure his music. If not, could extra lyrics be added by the composer for a chorus or bridge, clearly in consideration with the current lingo and vibe?


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Matthew_George_Hall
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That is wonderful poetry Dean someone will put it into music they should good luck


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Dave_Mack
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Give it a go David. I am sure you can bring Deans words to life.


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Matthew_George_Hall
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Yeh Davie u can do it cutie


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Posted

very good. unfortunately like yourself I am no good with music just words. sorry


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Charlie

How about: -

Tell us the truth, don't tell us lies.
We know what is real, we to do have eyes.

Will that do as a bridge or chorus? It is supposed to be as song by school levers who have been lied to by teachers etc about their future.

Could also add this verse before the last one


I did a degree
It didn’t come free
It takes all I earn
As the burger I turn.


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Dave_Mack
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If someone does put it to music I wanna hear it..


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David_Dubber
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Dean/Dave..............yes would love to here that set to a great piece of music


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Homer_Bozarth
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same here


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David_Cloud
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Dean, is there a typo in the last phrase of your suggested bridge/chorus? Should it be ....'we too have eyes.'. (hope I've guessed that right...?)


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Dennis_Mix
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Sounds great to me too. I would say go for it Dean it will make a good song.

Alfawolf


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